Every key moment, with the real clip, on its line
Hi Narin, this is the board with your notes from today applied.
The bird is out of the whole film, and the film now ends on the night sky. Every shot that changed in this round is marked “New”. The lines you marked still have the gold frame.
The pictures are library previews, so some carry a watermark. The film itself will be 4K.
Tap any picture to watch that clip moving on the library’s own page.
Intro · from 0:00
“This seems fine.”
Unchanged. One long, slow flight with no cuts. The last shot of the film mirrors this one, now over the mountains.
See the clip on Artgrid ↗Rising over the city at sunrise
See the clip on Artgrid ↗Down to the house by the water, and its tall tree
Verse 1 · from 0:12
“Please remove all the bird shots and replace them. Find a more suitable man.”
The bird is out. On 'Sab mera' he stands at the glass of his house with everything he owns below him. The news now lands on a bearded, dark-haired man, the same look as the man in the woods later: his hand goes to his head on the first beat of the line. The verse ends on him in silhouette, alone in the house.
See the clip on Artgrid ↗Haumain meri na milan denda
My ego does not let me meet You
He walks through his house
See the clip on Envato ↗In his chair, his suit, his cuffs
See the clip on Artgrid ↗Daat teriyan naal judiya rehnda
I stay attached to Your gifts
His watch
See the clip on Artgrid ↗Sab mera mera mann ae kehnda
My mind keeps saying: it's all mine
He stands at the glass of his house, in silhouette. Everything below him is his
See the clip on Artgrid ↗The same shot pulls back: the whole house around him, and he looks out over all of it
See the clip on Envato ↗Taahi duniya vich main dukh sehnda
That is why I suffer in this world
The news, on the first beat of the line. His hand goes to his head
See the clip on Artgrid ↗In silhouette, alone in the house, his head in his hands. Then straight out into the open
Pre-chorus 1 · from 1:00
“Remove the coast in gold clip in pre-chorus 1 and add some other mountain scenery only.”
The coast is out. Mountains in the last gold light are in. Long holds, in the order of the words, never cut on the words.
See the clip on Artgrid ↗Tann vi tera
The body is Yours
Tann: rock and ridge, the body of the earth
See the clip on Artgrid ↗Mann vi tera
The mind is Yours
Mann: sky and cloud
See the clip on Artgrid ↗Tun vi tera
Even You are Yours
Tunn: river and forest, owned by no one
See the clip on Artgrid ↗The mountains in the last gold light
Chorus 1 · from 1:18
“Select only 1 flag video, where the flag is wavering in the wind in slow motion. The incense video was nice also. Maybe some lamp close up to see the flames.”
One flag clip only, the flags waving in slow motion under the snow peaks. The bell is out, because it was really a second flag shot. The incense is back. A lamp close up is in, so you see the flame. Six shots, about four seconds each.
See the clip on Artgrid ↗The sun breaking over the mountains
See the clip on Artgrid ↗Rows of lamps being lit, in slow motion
See the clip on Artgrid ↗One lamp, close up, as it is lit. You see the flame
See the clip on Artgrid ↗Tera tera tera tera
Yours, Yours, Yours, Yours
Folded hands against the light
See the clip on Artgrid ↗Prayer flags waving in the wind under the snow peaks, in slow motion
See the clip on Artgrid ↗Incense smoke in the low sun
Verse 2 · from 1:42
“Please remove the bird from here, and find a video where a person smiles after a realization.”
The bird is out. On 'Jadon jagiya' his eyes are closed, then they open, he looks at the world and smiles. Then one single shot for both window lines, him on the balcony as the day goes down.
See the clip on Artgrid ↗Bahar andar sab vich vasda
Outside, inside, You dwell in everything
Morning in the garden, mostly him gazing
See the clip on Envato ↗Jadon jagiya duniya vekh main hasda
When I woke, I looked at the world and laughed
His eyes are closed. They open, he looks at the world and he smiles
See the clip on Artgrid ↗Raat langhni hai, ghar jaana hai savera
The night has to pass; at dawn I must go home
On the balcony over the city, sunset
See the clip on Artgrid ↗Chhadna ae duniya, ghar baar basera
The world must be left behind
The same shot, unbroken, through this line too
Pre-chorus 2 · from 2:29
“Remove the last shot, since he is already in the mountains. Find something more related.”
The look back at the city is out. Bare feet, his hand through the ferns, his eyes closing, sitting still in the forest. For Tun vi tera he walks on into the light between the trees, in silhouette, with nothing in his hands.
See the clip on Artgrid ↗Tann vi tera
The body is Yours
Tann: bare feet on the forest floor
See the clip on Artgrid ↗His hand brushes the ferns as he walks
See the clip on Artgrid ↗Mann vi tera
The mind is Yours
Mann: his eyes close, stillness
See the clip on Artgrid ↗Sitting in the forest, meditating
See the clip on Artgrid ↗Tun vi tera
Even You are Yours
Tunn: in silhouette, he walks on into the light between the trees, with nothing in his hands
Chorus 2 · from 2:51
“The bowing video, find something more dramatic and silhouette.”
A new bow, all in silhouette against the evening sky: he kneels with his hands folded, then bows all the way to the ground. Then him in the mountain lake at sunset, and the small figure in the mountains, held long.
See the clip on Envato ↗He kneels, hands folded, in silhouette against the sky
See the clip on Envato ↗The same shot: he bows all the way to the ground
See the clip on Envato ↗In the mountain lake at sunset, in silhouette, mountains on every side
See the clip on Artgrid ↗Held long: a small figure in the mountains, from above
Verse 3 · from 3:09
“Keep the ending night sky and mountains only.”
New setting: he climbs. By the time the line comes he is already standing above the clouds at sunset. His hands go up and stay up.
See the clip on Artgrid ↗Aao kariye sachcha vaapaar
Come, let us do the true trade
He walks up into the mountains
See the clip on Artgrid ↗Katiye aavan jaavan baar baar
Let us end this coming and going
Higher, above the clouds
Righting the fallen plant has no real clip, so his climb carries this line
See the clip on Artgrid ↗Already in place as the sun goes down
See the clip on Artgrid ↗Ral-mil kariye dilon pukaar
Together, let us cry out from the heart
Both hands up, a call
See the clip on Artgrid ↗Bakhsh deyo mere daataar
Forgive me, my Giver
The same shot: hands still up, reaching into the last light
Final chorus · from 3:36
“Let the last videos end with the night sky only, maybe a man walking in silhouette at night, or he is looking at a shooting star.”
His hands stay up through every 'kya mera'. Then he walks on up the ridge into the last light. No dawn any more: from here it is night to the end. He walks the ridge in silhouette, he stands under the stars, and the film ends on the night sky over the mountains with shooting stars. Then black, then the title.
See the clip on Artgrid ↗Tera tera tera, kya mera
Yours, Yours, Yours. What is mine?
Between the three 'kya mera': the mountains above the clouds. Each time we return, his hands are still up
See the clip on Artgrid ↗Tann vi tera
The body is Yours
He walks on up the ridge into the last light, like someone walking home
See the clip on Artgrid ↗Night falls. He walks on along the ridge, a small silhouette
See the clip on Artgrid ↗He stops under the stars and looks up
See the clip on Envato ↗Sab Tera
All is Yours
The night sky over the mountains. Shooting stars cross it
See the clip on Artgrid ↗The last picture: only the night sky over the peaks, held long. Then black, then the title
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